NAPLAN Writing Results from 2016 to reflect on

Click on the tabs at the top to explore to explore Year 3, Year 5 and Year 7 results

It will be important to prepare students for either a persuasive or narrative text. Exploring the difference between the two in structure and language use will help to prepare students.

Writing Rubrics and Descriptions of National Minimum Standards for Year 3, 5 and 7
Persuasive writing rubric-wq1m7k

Narrative writing rubric-15h1h50

NAPLAN Writing Resources from website:
https://www.nap.edu.au/naplan/writing

Graphic Organisers – Reading Comprehension and Writing Plans

EALD Language and Literacy Levelling Process 2017

Refer to Year 3 text ‘A Spider in the House’

Using the following form and your Language and Literacy Levels book, assign a level to each aspect and decide on an overall level. Discuss findings.
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Continue the levelling process of Wave 2 and 3 students in your year level teams.

Refer to the narratives here to moderate your judgements.

If you prefer to highlight texts as you are levelling use these colours:

– foregrounding- Yellow

noun groups

verbs

circumstances

conjunctions

Teaching Foci-

2015 – Sentence Structure

2016 – Sentence Structure and Text Cohesion

2017 – Sentence Structure, Text Cohesion and expand vocabulary

 

Teaching Strategies

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EALD Levelling – How is it going?

Have you come up with any scaffolds to help you with the process? Would you like to share any tips or tricks?

I have adapted the original EALD notes for assigning a level to help me gather information. Feel free to use and give feedback. I think this will be useful to set clearer goals for students.

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For example:
Student 1 could improve by building more interesting noun groups, as only pointers, describers and classifiers have been used. (Challenge: Include a range of expanded noun groups in your writing to suit the audience and purpose.

 

Which? How many? What like? What type? Who or what? More information
I felt like throttling those two scruffy alley cats on the roof that were yowling all night.
 MEANING Pointer Quantifier Describer Classifier Thing Qualifier
 FORM Determiner Numeral Adjective Noun Noun Prepositional phrase and/ or embedded clause

Student 2 could work on using a range of complex sentence structures, including a wider range of (binding) conjunctions and including non-finite sentences. (Challenge: try to switch sentence around during editing process)
Student 3  could also work on developing sentence structures by perhaps focusing on expanding circumstances (Challenge: Add more detail? Where? When? How? Why?)

Student 4  could be working on the punctuating of sentences, especially using commas for effect between describers and after text connectives.

Model of a Descriptive Report (basic Information Report)

 

Title Red-bellied piranha

General statement

Entity classification

The red-bellied piranha is a type of fish that lives in the Amazon River.

Description

Features

It has an orange belly, grey back, and very sharp teeth set in strong jaws. It grows up to 33 centimetres in length.

Diet

Behaviour

The red-bellied piranha hunts in shoals of 20-30 fish. They feed on a diet of fish, insects, snails, plants, and river animals. They hide in vegetation in order to ambush prey, and they also chase prey and scavenge for food. The younger, smaller fish hunt by day, and the older, bigger fish hunt at dawn and dusk.
Reproduction The female lays a clutch of up to 1 000 eggs.
Life expectancy Piranhas can live for about 100 years.

 

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Teaching Language in Context, Beverly Derewianka and Pauline Jones, Oxford, 2013

The Australian Goldrushes: A Historical Report

Stages and Phases

Title The Australian Goldrushes

General statement

Identification

Time

Place

The Australian goldrushes are significant in Australian nineteenth-century history. The first verified discovery of gold was around Bathurst, New South Wales, in 1851. Goldfields were then established in areas around the nation. People came from all over the world with the intention of striking it rich. Between 1845 and 1896 Australia’s population more than doubled, going from 400 000 to 1 000 000 people.

Description

Environment

Accommodation

At first, goldfields were established in rough environments longside rivers. As the claims of success and wealth grew, the sites became busy. The surrounding ridges became huge campsites housing prospectors and their families as well as tradespeople attracted by other work prospects. People lived in tents at first; later, huts made from wood, canvas, and bark were common. Over time the goldfields became towns and cities. At the start of a goldrush site, there were very few roads, meaning that everything had to be carried in from the surrounding townships. As the site developed, people travelled on horseback or wheeled their possessions in barrows.

Transport

Employment opportunities

Nutrition and health

While it was the opportunity of striking it rich that attracted many, other people stayed for the other job opportunities. Mostly, the people who flourished at teh goldfields were the tradespeople selling food and equipment and the landowners, selling land to people for homes. The diigings also provided employment in services such as laundry, inns, and boarding houses, and even hospitals.

Health and hygiene became an issue on the diggings. People lived on a basic diet of damper, tea, and mutton, which didn’t provide the necessary nutrition and variety. Sewage was not correctly disposed of and, as a result, clean drinking and washing water became contaminated. In addition to this, diseases and epidemics were brought to the diggings by the people arriving from overseas by ship. While there were doctors and nurses, they could not deal with the numbers so many people died from illnesses such as dysentry and typhoid.

Historical significance of the goldrushes The goldrushes played an important role in building the Australian nation. They were responsible for diversifying an economy formerly based on wheat and sheep. The influx of immigrants contributed to a multicultural society. The heritage of the goldrush era is still apparent in many of the public buildings in cities such as Bathurst and Ballarat.

Teaching Language in Context, Beverly Derewianka and Pauline Jones, Oxford, 2013